not bad at all
The chorus sounds amazing. I just thought I'd say that before putting out some criticism. Your voice, while better than most, sounds rather weak throughout most of the song. Because of the chorus, I know you can do better, so I'd suggest maybe doing many different takes on the vocals until you have a perfect version of every section, mixing those perfect sections together into the final song. Who knows; maybe it could be improved simply by doubling the vocal track. If not, maybe voice lessons would be of great interest to you, because the natural talent is definitely there. During the bridge or whatever, when the vocal sound quality goes down... yeah, don't do that. I know it's supposed to sound lo-fi, but in this case it really kinda punches a hole in an otherwise well-produced song. (by the way, what are you using to record the vocals?) As for the music itself, it's very well-composed (I see that you're a music major), but it's a tad conventional for my liking. The drums in particular; generally I dislike hearing synth drums passed of as the real thing, but I understand it can be difficult to get a real set, let alone to record it. As for the lyrics, they're decent enough, and that's a lot coming from me; I'm very very picky when it comes to lyrics. Overall, a very good effort, with room for improvement (but then again, there almost always is!).